- My writing "flowed well"
- There were no problems with grammar and punctuation
- She called the first paragraph "great" and "catchy"
- She liked my main character "she captivated me" and wanted to read on
- she marked several phrases with "lovely" and "great characterisation"
- She really liked my "cliffhanger" chapter endings
- She really liked my second chapter even though it was very different to the first
- My character was too quick to argue in one scene (too little motivation)
- My character did something unlikely in another scene
(Both fixable with a quick re-write)
The really bad:
- There is a huge, big, fat plot hole in my synopsis that makes the entire story incomprehensible (my words not Vandas)
I had a quiet freak out when I read the "I'm confused" comments on the synopsis and then I had a think and then my brain hurt (a lot) and then I freaked out a bit more.
At first I didn't think it was fixable and seriously considered trashing the entire novel. Then I had an idea and pencilled it into the synopsis. I'm still not sure if it will work. As I said before my story might possibly be classified as "paranormal chicklit" and, for this 'fix' to work, it requires a fair amount of suspension of disbelief on the part of the reader. But how far will people suspend their disbelief before they go "Nah, this is just silly?"
I have sent out an SOS to try and find out...