Tuesday, 27 May 2008

Her hair glistened in the rain like a nose hair after a sneeze

Being a bit crap at them myself I'm very jealous of any writer that can produce fantastic similes and metaphors. I'll often re-read a particularly well crafted turn of phrase, marvel at the way the writer's mind works and then feel a bit sick at my own lack of skill. But crap similes and metaphors can make me laugh....a lot....

Below, for your delectation, is something I saw on notesfromtheslushpile's blog and instantly nicked....



Every year, English teachers from across the country can submit their collections of actual similes and metaphors found in high school essays. These excerpts are published each year to the amusement of teachers across the country. Here are last year's winners:

1. Her face was a perfect oval, like a circle that had its two sides gently compressed by a thigh Master.

2. His thoughts tumbled in his head, making and breaking alliances like underpants in a dryer without Cling Free.

3. He spoke with the wisdom that can only come from experience, like a guy who went blind because he looked at a solar eclipse without one of those boxes with a pinhole in it and now goes around the country speaking at high schools about the dangers of looking at a solar eclipse without one of those boxes with a pinhole in it.

4. She grew on him like she was a colony of E.Coli, and he was room-temperature Canadian beef.

5. She had a deep, throaty, genuine laugh, like that sound a dog makes just before it throws up.

6. Her vocabulary was as bad as, like, whatever.

7. He was as tall as a six-foot, three-inch tree.

8. The revelation that his marriage of 30 years had disintegrated because of his wife's infidelity came as a rude shock, like a surcharge at a formerly surcharge-free ATM machine.



9. The little boat gently drifted across the pond exactly the way a bowling ball wouldn't.

10. McBride fell 12 stories, hitting the pavement like a Hefty bag filled with vegetable soup.

11. From the attic came an unearthly howl. The whole scene had an eerie, surreal quality, like when you're on vacation in another city and Jeopardy comes on at 7:00 p.m. instead of 7:30.

12. Her hair glistened in the rain like a nose hair after a sneeze.

13. The hailstones leaped from the pavement, just like maggots when you fry them in hot grease.

14. Long separated by cruel fate, the star-crossed lovers raced across the grassy field toward each other like two freight trains, one having left Cleveland at 6:36 p.m. traveling at 55 mph, the other from Topeka at 4:19 p.m. at a speed of 35 mph.

15. They lived in a typical suburban neighborhood with picket fences that resembled Nancy Kerrigan's teeth.



16. John and Mary had never met. They were like two hummingbirds who had also never met.

17. He fell for her like his heart was a mob informant, and she was the East River.

18. Even in his last years, Granddad had a mind like a steel trap, only one that had been left out so long, it had rusted shut.

19. Shots rang out, as shots are known to do.

20. The plan was simple, like my brother-in-law Phil. But unlike Phil, this plan just might work.

21. The young fighter had a hungry look, the kind you get from not eating for a while.

22. The ballerina rose gracefully en Pointe and extended one slender leg behind her, like a dog at a fire hydrant.

23. It was an American tradition, like fathers chasing kids around with power tools.

24. He was deeply in love. When she spoke, he thought he heard bells, as if she were a garbage truck backing up.

And my personal favourite of the bunch...

25. He was as lame as a duck. Not the metaphorical lame duck, either, but a real duck that was actually lame, maybe from stepping on a land mine or something.

10 comments:

Tam said...

He was as tall as a six foot, three inch tree...Briliiant!!

And I wish I'd thought of #20 myself - I gather not all of them were chosen because they were bad!

Great stuff :-)

Yvonne said...

Thanks for the laughs on a rainy day! I love No. 18, brilliant.

Calistro said...

Tam - I thought #20 was very clever too!

Yvonne - Another one of my favourites!

Bernadette said...

I rather liked 17 and 20. But most of them go to prove that less really is more!
Thanks for the laugh x

Candy Gourlay said...

ha ha! you nicked that quickly! and i searched all over the internet for a sneeze picture like that! well done!

womagwriter said...

Thanks for the giggle! My favourite is the ballerina one.

A. Writer said...

They are hilarious!

HelenMH said...

I love all of them - so funny!

Juliette M said...

Hmmm the one about the boat and the bowling ball makes me think they nicked it from Douglas Adams...

"they hung in the air in exactly the way that bricks don't."

Classic.

Quillers said...

Oh these are brilliant! Best laugh I've had for ages.